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PE 1408 · fol. 16

Plain Style and Word Choice

Plain style makes the argument easy to follow by preferring concrete words, active verbs, and sentences that say one thing at a time. · 12 min

Plain style is not plain thinking. A clear sentence can carry a hard idea; what it refuses to do is make the idea harder than it is. Three habits produce it. Prefer the concrete word to the abstract one. Prefer the active verb — someone doing something — to a noun built from a verb. And let each sentence say one thing at a time, so the reader takes the argument in one clean step per sentence. None of this thins your meaning. It removes the fog between the meaning and the reader, which is the only thing plain style ever cuts.

Guess before you learn

Which sentence states its point most plainly?

THE DEPTH DIAL — the same idea, younger or deeper
9–12

9–12

Plain style is a discipline of choices, not a reading grade. Start with the verb: a strong, specific verb (vetoed, collapsed, doubled) does work that a weak verb plus a noun (issued a veto, underwent a collapse) only pretends to. The nominalization — a verb frozen into a noun — is the most common source of foggy prose, because it hides who does what and pulls in filler to prop it up. Next, prefer the concrete to the abstract where the argument allows; a reader grasps a named thing faster than a category. Finally, govern sentence load: one main assertion per sentence, with detail branching to the right of it, keeps the reader moving instead of holding clauses in memory. Plainness is what remains when the fog is gone — the meaning underneath can be as hard as it needs to be.

nominalization

A verb turned into a noun: decide becomes make a decision, consider becomes give consideration to. Nominalizations hide the action and pull in filler words. Turning the noun back into a verb is the fastest way to make a sentence plain.

Ink That Thinks — guess first; the answer draws itself.
These are the parts of one plain sentence, scrambled. Drag them into the order that puts the actor and action first and lets each part add one thing.

  1. The mayor vetoed the budget
  2. late Friday
  3. because it cut funding for the fire stations
  4. that answer the most calls.
Reorder, then commit.
PLATE I One plain sentence assembled — actor and action first, each part adding a single thing.
BLOATEDPLAINmake a decisiondecideis in agreement withagrees withdue to the fact thatbecausegive consideration toconsiderat this point in timenowhas the ability tocan
PLATE II Common nominalizations and padding, and the plain word each one hides.
Retrieval Gate — answer before you continue 0 / 3

1.Which revision is in the plainest style?

2.Match each bloated phrase to its plain replacement.

make a decision
due to the fact that
give consideration to
at this point in time

3.In one sentence: what is a nominalization, and why does it cloud a sentence?

The working method is three passes over a sentence you want to make plain. First, find the real action and the one performing it; if the action is hiding in a noun — a reduction, an improvement — free it back into a verb. Second, make that performer the subject and the freed verb the main verb, so the sentence says who does what up front. Third, check the load: if the sentence still carries two or three separate assertions, break it so each says one thing. Then read the result aloud. Plain prose survives being spoken; tangled prose runs out of breath.

Rewrite a bloated sentence in plain style — the steps fade as you master them

1
The draft reads: 'It is the belief of the committee that a reduction in the number of meetings would result in an improvement in productivity.' Find the actor and the action.
Actor: the committee. Action hidden in belief → believes.
2
Free the nominalizations: 'a reduction in the number of meetings' and 'an improvement in productivity.'
→ fewer meetings; → improve productivity
3
Make the actor the subject and rebuild the sentence.
The committee believes fewer meetings would improve productivity.
4
Count the words against the original.
22 words become 8 — same claim, no fog.
Bloated version22 wordsPlain version8 words
PLATE III The same claim, before and after — plain style is shorter because it stops hiding the actor and the action.
Why is this true?

Why prefer an active verb to a noun built from that same verb?

Because the noun (a nominalization) hides the action inside a naming word and needs a weak helper verb and extra articles to stand up — make a decision for decide. The active verb states the action directly and names who performs it, so the reader sees who does what without unpacking anything. Plainer, shorter, and clearer at once.

Retrieval Gate — answer before you continue 0 / 3

1.A sentence in your draft says: 'The implementation of the new policy was carried out by the staff.' What is the plain-style fix?

2.Order the three moves as the method applies them to a bloated sentence.

  1. Free the action from the noun back into a verb.
  2. Make the actor the subject of that verb.
  3. Break the sentence so it says one thing at a time.

3.Without looking back: name the three habits of plain style.

That is the whole arc. You began with a topic, narrowed it to a question, answered the question in an arguable thesis, and defended that thesis in paragraphs that each do one job, on evidence that fits, inside openings and closings that promise and deliver. Then you revised — the argument's shape first, the dead weight next, the sentences last. An essay is not written in one motion; it is built, tested, and cleared until the argument stands in plain view. You now have the whole sequence. What remains is to use it, on a question you actually care to answer.

Practice — new ink and old, interleaved

1.Which sentence is plainest?

2.From folio 14, in one sentence: which revision comes first, fixing the argument's shape or fixing the sentences, and why?

3.What does a reverse outline reveal?

4.These three sentences belong to one paragraph but are scrambled. Put them in the order that builds a single idea: claim first, then its supports.

  1. Young children learn more from play and sleep than from worksheets at night.
  2. Making it optional lets families choose what their child actually needs.
  3. Homework should be optional in the early grades.

5.From folio 5, in one sentence: how many ideas should a single paragraph carry?

6.In one sentence: rewrite 'A decision to cancel the trip was made by the teachers' in plain style, and say what you changed.

7.From folio 15: a paragraph is beautifully written but serves no part of your thesis. What do you do?

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