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PE 1408 · fol. 14

Revising Global Before Local

Revision fixes large problems before small ones: reverse-outline the draft to check the argument's shape before touching any sentence. · 12 min

When a draft is done, the eye jumps to the nearest flaw — a clumsy comma, a repeated word — and starts fixing. Resist that. A polished sentence in a paragraph that should be cut is wasted polish, and a smooth transition between two paragraphs in the wrong order only hides the disorder. Revision has an order of operations: fix the largest problems first. Before you touch a single sentence, check whether the argument's shape is right at all. This folio teaches the tool that shows you the shape — the reverse outline — and the habit of working global before local.

Guess before you learn

You have thirty minutes to revise a finished draft. Which move should come first?

THE DEPTH DIAL — the same idea, younger or deeper
9–12

9–12

Revision has a hierarchy, and the reverse outline enforces it. Write each paragraph's claim in the margin, then read the claims alone. Four faults show up immediately. A paragraph with two claims should split. A paragraph with no claim should be cut, or its buried point found and stated. Two paragraphs with the same claim should merge. And claims in an order that does not build toward the thesis should be resequenced. Every one of these is a structural fix — moving, splitting, merging, cutting whole paragraphs. None of it is sentence work. Do it first, because sentence work done first may polish paragraphs that the structural pass removes. Global before local is not a preference; it is the order that keeps you from paying twice.

reverse outline

An outline written after the draft: the single claim of each paragraph, listed and read on its own. It shows the argument's real shape — order, gaps, repeats, and paragraphs with no point.

Ink That Thinks — guess first; the answer draws itself.
A draft argues that the town should keep its library open on Sundays. Here are its four paragraph claims, scrambled. Drag them into the order that builds toward the thesis.

  1. Sunday is the only day many working residents are free to use the library.
  2. Usage data shows Sunday afternoons were the busiest hours before the cut.
  3. The Sunday staffing cost is small next to the number of residents it serves.
  4. So the closure saves little while shutting out the readers who need the library most.
Reorder, then commit.
PLATE I Four paragraph claims, ordered into an argument that builds — the reverse outline made visible.
WHAT THE CLAIM-LIST SHOWSTHE STRUCTURAL FIXA paragraph with two claimsSplit it into twoA paragraph with no claimCut it, or find and state its pointThe same claim in two paragraphsMerge themA claim out of sequenceMove it where it builds
PLATE II Four faults a reverse outline exposes, and the structural fix each one calls for.
Retrieval Gate — answer before you continue 0 / 3

1.What does a reverse outline reveal?

2.In one sentence: why fix global problems before local ones?

3.Match each fault the claim-list shows to its structural fix.

Two claims in one paragraph
A paragraph with no claim
The same claim made twice
A claim out of order

The method is short. First, write the single claim of each paragraph in the margin — one line, in your own words, not a quotation lifted from the text. If you cannot state a paragraph's claim in a line, that is itself a finding. Second, read only the list of claims, top to bottom, ignoring the prose. Ask four questions: is the order building toward the thesis, is any step missing, is anything said twice, does every paragraph carry exactly one claim? Fix what the list shows — move, split, merge, cut — and only then open the sentences.

Reverse-outline a four-paragraph draft — the steps fade as you master them

1
Write the claim of paragraph 1.
P1: The town's recycling rate has fallen for three years.
2
Write the claim of paragraph 2.
P2: The single-stream bins confuse residents about what is recyclable.
3
Paragraph 3 tells a long story about one family but states no claim. What is the fix?
Cut it, or find its point — here none serves the thesis, so cut.
4
Paragraph 4 repeats paragraph 1's claim. What is the fix?
Merge it into P1; do not make the same point twice.
read the claim-listonce the shape is soundFinished draftGlobal passReverse-outline: fix order, gaps, repeats, empty paragraphsLocal passOnly now: sentences, words, punctuation
PLATE III The two-pass order — the argument's shape first, the sentences second.
Why is this true?

Why start with the argument's shape when the sentence errors are the ones you can actually see?

Because a correct sentence in a paragraph you later move or cut is wasted work, and a smooth transition between mis-ordered paragraphs only disguises the disorder. Structure decides which sentences survive to be polished, so it comes first — the visible errors are cheap to fix once you know they will remain.

Retrieval Gate — answer before you continue 0 / 3

1.A draft argues that school should start an hour later. Order its paragraph claims into the sequence that builds.

  1. Teenagers' body clocks make early waking biologically hard.
  2. Local schools that shifted later saw attendance and grades rise.
  3. The bus-schedule cost of a later start is modest and one-time.
  4. So a later start helps students at a price the district can absorb.

2.You reorder your paragraphs, then notice you had already spent twenty minutes perfecting the wording of the paragraph you just cut. What lesson does this teach?

3.Without looking back: what is a reverse outline, and what order of operations does it serve?

A sound reverse outline tells you the argument's shape is right — the claims are in order, nothing is missing, nothing is doubled. But a paragraph can sit in the right place, read beautifully, and still do no work for the thesis. Those are the hardest to remove, because they are often your best writing. The next folio is about removing them anyway.

Practice — new ink and old, interleaved

1.From folio 5, in one sentence: how many ideas should a single paragraph carry?

2.Match each form of writing to what it mainly does.

Story
Report
Essay

3.These three sentences belong to one paragraph but are scrambled. Put them in the order that builds a single idea: claim first, then its supports.

  1. Young children learn more from play and sleep than from worksheets at night.
  2. Making it optional lets families choose what their child actually needs.
  3. Homework should be optional in the early grades.

4.From folio 6: a reverse outline is easy to write when each paragraph has what?

5.In one sentence: what should you do with a paragraph your reverse outline shows carries two different claims?

6.What is an essay's basic job?

7.A draft argues the city should turn vacant lots into community gardens. Order its paragraph claims so the argument builds.

  1. Vacant lots downtown sit unused and collect litter.
  2. A pilot garden on Fifth Street drew forty families in its first season.
  3. Converting a lot costs less than the city spends mowing it.
  4. So the city should turn its vacant lots into community gardens.
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